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 Posted: Sat Feb 24th, 2007 03:24 pm
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Luana Krause
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Inspired by Timmy's terrific one-minute play, I've written one of my own:

Coffee Klatch

by Luana Krause

 

(Cordelia and Phoebe are sitting at kitchen table drinking coffee.)

 

CORDELIA: So where is he now?

 

PHOEBE: In the basement.

 

CORDELIA: The basement? How did you get him down there?

 

PHOEBE: It wasn’t too difficult. I had so much adrenaline flowing through my body I could have lifted a bulldozer. I wrapped a towel around his head and dragged him by the feet.

 

CORDELIA: Good idea. The towel, I mean.

 

PHOEBE: His head still thumped on each step, though. Couldn’t do much about that.

 

CORDELIA: What time did you…?

 

PHOEBE: Four-thirty.

 

CORDELIA: I was watching “Oprah.”

 

PHOEBE: Yes. We were both watching “Oprah.” Here at your house. Right?

 

CORDELIA: Right.

 

PHOEBE: Who was on the show?

 

CORDELIA: Um…I think it was Nathan Lane.

 

PHOEBE: Well, was it Nathan Lane or not?

 

CORDELIA: Yes. I’m sure it was Nathan Lane.

 

PHOEBE: He’s wonderful. Sorry I missed it.

 

CORDELIA: Me, too. More coffee?

 

PHOEBE: Yes, please.

 

THE END

 

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 Posted: Sun Feb 25th, 2007 04:29 pm
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Mana: 
Very nice, Luana. 

Sipping coffee is nice.  You know...in the get in late, get out early theory, you could do away with the first to lines and start the play at...

CORDELIA: The basement? How did you get him down there?

It would feel less like a beginning and more like we stumbled upon their conversation.

Paddy

 

 

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 Posted: Sun Feb 25th, 2007 09:44 pm
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Mana: 
Love it, Luana!

I've been looking for examples of mystery plays; yours is a good one!

And a One Minute play?  Now that's more my style with my short attention span these days!  LOL

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 Posted: Sun Feb 25th, 2007 10:12 pm
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Luana Krause
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Mana: 
Paddy and Bobbi...thanks for reading and for the great feedback.

I had such fun with this...I really enjoy writing short pieces. 

Luana

 

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 Posted: Mon Feb 26th, 2007 04:35 pm
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Mana: 
I agree with the idea to start late.  This is an interesting short piece because the "climax" is earlier offstage, and the play is about how they react to it.  I thought it was fun, a perfect idea for a one-minute scene.

 

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 Posted: Mon Feb 26th, 2007 07:11 pm
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Luana Krause
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Mana: 
Hi, Schmacko: Thanks for reading. I agree with Paddy, too. One hundred percent improvement.

I appreciate your comments. Maybe a collection of these plays on a "mystery" theme would make for an interesting evening of theatre.

Luana

 

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