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Mary Alice
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Posted: Sat Jul 19th, 2008 10:28 pm

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Posted: Mon Jul 21st, 2008 01:39 pm

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Mary Alice.

This is really lovely. Lots of things spilling from her mind in this moment. I don't, however, really see any need for Maeve. It feels like a monologue...oh, she's talking to Maeve...but I think this piece would be much stronger, more intriguing, without Maeve being there.

But then, it might just be me.

Still....really good story. Maybe I needed to know more...because the idea of this in the fifties was very interesting. Maybe not. I'll think on that.

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Posted: Mon Jul 21st, 2008 06:19 pm

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Again, another wonderful piece from Mary Alice. I very much like Maeve. Maeve is an echo, almost another piece of Sandra, maybe from long ago. I like the ambiguity of the piece. Also, I would not make it a monologue for a practical reason as well. You will be hard-pressed to find a festival accepting monologues. And I'd love to see this on the boards. Beautiful. Thank you.

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Posted: Thu Jul 24th, 2008 01:15 pm

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Mary Alice,

A very nice piece indeed. You have taken the well-worn path of reminiscence about a lost loved one and somehow made it feel fresh again.

Your writing has a lovely ethereal quality without ever becoming 'woolly' or unfocussed. I usually turn right off when characters make declarations beginning 'Love is ...' or 'Life is...' - but somehow you managed to get away with it.

I definitely do not think it should be a monologue; seems to me like the second character is crucial to the integrity of the work - the audience needs to see her preconceptions challenged mirroring the challenges to their own preconceptions about these characters.

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