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 Posted: Sun Aug 16th, 2009 06:32 pm
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THIRTY SECONDS IN HISTORY
AUGUST 16, 1977



A BATHROOM IN GRACELAND
ELVIS STANDS AT THE MIRROR WITH HIS FINGERS IN HIS MOUTH TOUCHING A REAR MOLAR AND THEN WINCING IN PAIN.



ELVIS
Sonny!  Sonny, Red!  Where the heck are you Sonny?  Damn hillbillies never around when you need them.  This tooth is killing me.  Where’s the dang aspirin?



There is a knock on the door



ELVIS
Sonny that had better be you.



He opens the door


A man in a suit stands on the other side holding a clipboard checking as he speaks



MAN
Mr. Presley?  Mr. Aaron Presley?



ELVIS
Who the hell are you?  How did you get in here?  Where Sonny? Where’s Red?



MAN
I’ve been sent to help Mr. Presley.



ELVIS
Help?  I don’t need no help? Not unless you got something for this tooth to stop hurting.



MAN
As a matter of fact.


He holds out a handful of pills



ELVIS
These’ll stop the hurting?



MAN
Guaranteed.



Elvis takes the pills and swallows them
Elvis falls to the floor



MAN
(looking thru papers)
Subject AP-7906  Elvis Presley ready for admit. Level three. Standard incept. Wait.. Hold a moment. I have a notation that the boss especially liked his version of Peace in the Valley.  Increase to level six.               all access pass
(looking at the body on the floor)
Elvis has left the building.



A blast of bright light
The opening notes of Strauss ‘Also Sprach Zarathustra

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 Posted: Sun Aug 16th, 2009 09:42 pm
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Ha! I love it!

 

You should seriously consider doing an entire book of these, they're hilarious and so not politically correct!

 

The only part that I didn't really get was the "Level Three" and "Level Six" things. At first I thought I understood (conspiracy theories, aliens maybe?, the government?). I guess I should be diong my homework on this.

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Nice! XD

I like the level upgrade, myself. I'd probably cut the "has left the building". I understand you put it there 'cause it's an overused joke, but I'm still not convinced it works. :)

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 Posted: Wed Mar 17th, 2010 04:09 pm
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Moonmi,

I agree.

Do a bunch of these.

I like the Level references.

I wonder if the same MAN would appear in all scenes? Or have a man and a woman alternate? Could be fun for a small troupe of actors to do a short evening of these. Just thoughts on my part.

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Moonmi,

I agree.

Do a bunch of these. 30 Seconds in History. 60 Second in history. 5 minutes in History. Whatever.

I like the Level references.

I wonder if the same MAN would appear in all scenes? Or have a man and a woman alternate? Could be fun for a small troupe of actors to do a short evening of these. Just thoughts on my part.

best,

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 Posted: Fri Mar 19th, 2010 06:26 pm
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Agreed,

keep going.

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