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 Posted: Wed Nov 16th, 2011 08:48 pm
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daveye
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Check this out. I am in the process of revising it and would love to hear what you have to say. I have the rest written and workshopped, I would love to post the ending, but only if it is worthy of your time.


ACT I

Scene 1

(All locations are represented. Jimmie's foxhole, Mothers home, Sage's home, The Rev's Pulpit, Elizabeth's Hotel Room, As well as Mrs. Cook's classroom. This opening scene is writing and reading of letters.)


Mother

I do not understand why you feel you must defy me at every turn. Your constant need to embarrass me has gone too far now and I will not stand for it. Do you not realize everything you do reflects on me?.....

SAGE

I have so much to tell you, but I need you home soon. I am not sure about how to deal with things without you here. Your mother won't even acknowledge the fact that I am alive, let alone we are together....

REV. DONALD LIVINGSTON

These words are and always will be the most powerful ever written. This church is yours, and to continue the great works we have been doing for the past fifteen years, we need you. Look within yourself and give whatever you can. With your Angel membership you will receive this, the latest and most profound interpretation of the Bible ever.......



ELIZABETH

Help me! I asked you to help me, and you left. Where is the money you promised to send? Why are you leaving me here to suffer alone in the hell that is life? I'm stuck. I thought YOU of all people were the one that I could count on. I have no money and since Mom is such a... well she's Mom. Your words were always clear, "I will take care of everything; I will take care of you." Where are.......

Ms. Cook

A wise man said once a day look in the mirror and make sure that you are proud of who you are. If not, what can you do to make up for your shortcomings. I was reading the paper today and saw a little notice that your unit had been sent over. May the people you meet and help there be the reflection you see every day of the good you are doing....

Drew

I have to tell you I find this very strange. Without you here, I have very little of that "inspiration" like you used to. I have a gig this weekend and I am struggling to find the next line to rhyme with pickle without repeating nickel or sickle.....

(As the scene begins to come up in light we see Slow as Death all facing away from the audience and spaced evenly around the stage)

Jimmie

Mother, I hope this finds you...

Sister

Dex, drop it off at my motel. I am out......

SAGE

My Love, so much to say, but ....

Mother

Elizabeth, I often wonder where things with you went wrong?....

Ms. Cook

Mrs. Jones, I am hoping to get James' address so I ......

TROY

Mom, we're in the shit. I mean we're really....

Doctor

Ms. Sharman, your next follow-up appointment should be in four weeks...

Mother

Reverend Donald, how do I confront a child who is at war? He, my son, has gone and ......

ELIZABETH

Jimmie, I miss you more than you could know. My struggle is beginning to take over and I am not sure where to .....

REV. DONALD LIVINGSTON

Ladies and Gentlemen, I stand before you with a belief that when we pull all of our might together we can move mountains.

SAGE

Ms. Cook, I found this note that Jimmie wrote and thought you would find it funny. Do you think he means it? I've been struggling a bit ....

Jimmie

My Sweetest, it's funny to think that I have landed in the worst place in the world and yet I am still the happiest person ever...

REV. DONALD LIVINGSTON

Every day we come to you with His word, His guidance. Help us reach more people, help us find our way into more homes. I urge you brothers and sisters to do your duty, play your part, make your sacrifice...

Ms. Cook

Mrs. Jones, James forgot his permission slip today. Could you please make sure he has it packed in his lunch box for Monday? The trip will be perfect for......

Mother

I saw that girl of yours running around with Pete. I would rather keep my nose out of it but...

Drew

Jimmie playing at Bobs this weekend. Kills me you won't be here for it.

Jimmie

My Sweetest, lying here crammed in my foxhole, surprisingly, I found myself thinking of the first time I laid eyes on you. You remember? Pete and I were out.....

Scene II

(Flashback to Jimmie and Sage meeting. Street downtown. Pete runs in excitedly)


PETE

Dude, you shoulda seen them! they were...

Jimmie

Huh?

(not paying attention because a girl has caught his eye)

Pete

No really.... they were the best pair of.....

Jimmie

yeah yeah yeah

Pete

Oh.....her

(as he realizes what has Jimmie's attention)

SAGE

Community College is not what I was hoping for

SASHA

At least you had that option.

SAGE

It's not an option.

SASHA

Hey, you want to get coffee?

SAGE

Huh?

(not paying attention because a boy has caught her eye. Gaze and drool)

SASHA

Coffee?

SAGE

Yeah, yeah. Catch up with you in a minute.

(she begins to walk toward Jimmie, Pete steps in front of her)

Pete

Hey

(she steps past him)


Pete

Hey, hey! How you doing?

SAGE

What is your friend's name?

(Slow as Death begin to move almost un-noticeably slow)


Pete

Who? Oh him? Uh, never seen him in my life.

SAGE

(not even listening)


Pete

Wait, no really, he's just some bum or some....Gah! Another one

Sage

You seem nice enough. Sasha's getting coffee. Why don't you join her?

(Pete is already walking away)


Pete:

Hey, Hey.....

Jimmie

Don't mind Pete. He's distractable....shiny objects, Eggo's, and any girl that walks by. I'm James....Jim. You can call me Jimmie.

SAGE

So you're like him? Shiny objects, Eggo's, any girl will do?

Jimmie

Nah, I'm more of a bacon and eggs sort of guy.

Sage

Oh. Uh, I don't cook.

Jimmie

How about Denny's?

Sage

Bacon and Eggs for two.

Scene III

(Rev. Livingston's pulpit/office and Mothers house)


REV. DONALD LIVINGSTON

Mrs. Jones, it is with the heart of every member of our fine congregation that we say thank you. Your donation will ease the burden felt by the church and help us maintain our daily devotion broadcasts. Your gift brings your total up so that you now move into the apostle category. With this comes a whole host of wonderful perks, primarily you will be receiving a sneak peek at my latest book Freedom Through Giving: How Your Gift Brings You Closer to God. Which also contains a preview copy of my letter to the American people....

Mother/REV. DONALD LIVINGSTON

Our sons and even some of our daughters

REV. DONALD LIVINGSTON:

have been sent into foreign lands, theatres of war with no moral compass to guide them. They have been brainwashed with the notion that they can pillage, steal take anything they want, in the name of America. What happened to this great country?

Mother

We are obsessed by our greed. We send our future to other lands to feed our greed. Mothers, grandmothers, wives, sisters send this message to your loved one fighting an unjust war. Yes, this is how I can finally get through to him. She folds the letter.

Scene IV

(Foxhole in the desert. Jimmie and Troy are fighting a war.)


Jimmie

Murdering? Pillaging? Is that what people...

TROY

Give it a break with these stupid letters!

Jimmie

My mother just sent me this crap from her "Reverend".... some televangelist freak, Don....

TROY

Rev. Donald Livingston?

Jimmie

Yup.

Troy

My aunt is a big fan of his and he's a huge fan of her checkbook. He's got one of them huge mega churches. What a racket. Talk about pillaging.

JIMMIE

What a moron. She really thinks that a letter from her "rev" will change everything! I didn't do this or anything for her. I did it......She spends the first twenty one years of my life avoiding giving me any parental advice and now this. I should have told her long ago, .....

(Begins to write Mother)

I forwarded a copy of this to your fine reverend. I find this long overdue yet more necessary than ever before. Your worries can stop. Your fear for me and how I make you look is a thing of the past now. Mother, I give you your freedom from me. In short I am through with you and your "help". I am choosing a path without you and you will hear no more from......

Scene V

(Mothers living room Elizabeth has come to ask for "help". Moves out into street)


Mother

Dear Elizabeth, the suffering you are going through is no one's fault but your own, I cannot and will not...

ELIZABETH

Mother...

Mother

I told you no!

ELIZABETH

You don't understand!

MOTHER

You are nothing but a burden!

ELIZABETH

And you are nothing but a disappointment!

Mother

My money goes to better causes and more hopeful cases than you.

ELIZABETH

Who? That stupid TV poser of a Rev?

MOTHER

At least his life has meaning. He helps people. He speaks to God.

ELIZABETH

Is God telling him to take all your money?

Mother

At least he isn't shooting my money up his arm!

(Mother turns away and Elizabeth turns to her dealer)


DEX

You got my money?

Elizabeth

Ah.....

DEX

Ain't no thing, for now, I won't wait forever.

(Doctor walks by)

ELIZABETH

Got any money, Mister?

Doctor

Not for your junk.

Elizabeth

Nah, I don't want to get high....I just need to eat.

Doctor

There's a shelter down on Wilson Street. They serve dinner as well.

(pause to look her up and down)

but you have to go to a meeting to get in.

Elizabeth

I don't need a meeting.

Doctor

So what you REALLY need?

Elizabeth

I...well...er..

Doctor

That's what you need to figure out.

(turns to leave)

Elizabeth

(to his back)

I need my brother

Scene VI

(Rev. Donald Livingston's Daily Devotion has just ended. The doctor enters mother's living room)


Mother

Every time I watch that dear man my soul is refreshed.

Doctor

Who?

Mother

Rev. Donald Livingston. He is helping me clear the clutter from my world and leave it all at the feet of Jesus.

Doctor

Speaking of clutter, I see you are beginning to make progress on clearing out that downstairs bedroom, so you don't have to climb those stairs anymore.

Mother

Yes, Doctor. Almost done, just this last box to go through. It's taken longer than I expected.

Doctor

Lots of memories in that old room?

Mother

Yes. Hard find any good ones though.

(reaches to box and pulls out card from Ms. Cook)

Dear Mrs. Jones, James is a pleasure to have in class.....

Scene VII

(Flashback to 3rd grade in Ms. Cook's classroom)


Ms. Cook

.....though he is a bit rambunctious, he is creative and has a good heart. Please encourage him to use his talents in positive ways. He has great, untapped potential. Sincerely, Ms. Cook PS. Mrs. Jones, James forgot his permission slip today. Could you please make sure he has it packed in his lunch box for Monday? The trip will be perfect for......

(others run into Ms. Cook's area and become her class)

Ms. Cook

....you all to learn some of the fascinating stories about our early military and history.

(Sasha raises hand)

SASHA

I went to see the U.S.S.S.S Constitution last weekend.

Ms. Cook

Oh good Sasha. You can show us all the ropes.

SASHA

It was boring. I knew more than the tour guide.

(general chatter of agreement....Jimmie raises his hand)

Ms. Cook

Yes, Jimmie?

Jimmie

Are we going to the aquarium?

Ms. Cook

Yes, Jimmie.

Pete

Oh oh ooohhh, I'm going to be a shark tamer when I grow up!

Ms. Cook

I'm sure of that, Pete.

Pete

Yes ma'am! Jimmie here will catch them and I'll tame them. We're gonna be rich! We're gonna have dancing sharks, singing sharks, sharks that can find shiny objects .......I love objects.....oh and Eggo's....and.......and shiny objects....

Jimmie

(holding up a paperclip)

Hey Pete!

Pete:

ooooooooo, shiny.......

Ms. Cook

OK, children its time to line up for the bus; Jimmie here you go this for your mom.

(hands Jimmie the note)

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