|Hi! This is my first time critiquing a play but I've read enough to feel like I'm on solid enough ground.
I'm a huge fan of the surreal and you absolutely nailed it.
I especially like the short dialogue, it creates a real childlike vulnerability in the characters.
The juxtaposed characters are also classically nice and well written.
Frankly, the premise is just really original and that's what shines the most. It reminds me, in some small way, of the horror film "It Follows", the writer revealed that the ever present monster was a metaphor for the loss of youth.
I wish I could give you more but I'm no expert.
I just really, really enjoyed it.