Posted: Fri Mar 21st, 2008 01:14 am
1 st Post
They sent me a photograph of her
She was smiling
In the conservatory
I was happy
She was happy
They said she smiles
all the time
Just sits there and smiles
In a world of her own
I was content to know
she was happy
smiling all day long
I was 3000 miles away
thinking she was smiling all day
Then I got the telephone call
I can't say what they told me right now
But maybe one day
Posted: Fri Mar 21st, 2008 02:13 am
2 nd Post
Oh. This poem is deceptively simple and manages to get under one's skin with a terrible feeling of dread. It's not so much a poem to critique as a prayer to offer.
Posted: Fri Mar 21st, 2008 05:46 am
3 rd Post
So many emotions in so short a time. Disturbing. Dark. Scary. Beautiful. Powerful. Uncomfortable anxiety.
Posted: Fri Mar 21st, 2008 01:51 pm
4 th Post
Thank you Deirdre
I wrote it last night in 2 miins, it just came to me when I was reading this Critique my Poem page. It was after I wrote it that I noticed it was up for Critiqueing, and I was going to Delete, but decided against it.
Posted: Fri Mar 21st, 2008 01:53 pm
5 th Post
Posted: Sat Mar 22nd, 2008 11:27 pm
6 th Post
Any poem that irks a reader is a good poem. The teeter-totter "up & down" of emotion is wonderful.
Posted: Sun Mar 23rd, 2008 08:20 pm
7 th Post
Posted: Sun Mar 23rd, 2008 08:40 pm
8 th Post
Easter Sunday afternoon, hubby has taken children to the park. The Lamb is in the oven and I'm sitting here reading through all your poetry.
They are wonderful, I just love them.
I'm nominating you as the Resident Poet or is it The Poet in Residence?
A lovely way to spend an afternoon
Posted: Mon Mar 24th, 2008 08:27 pm
9 th Post
a compliment. Many thanks.
Posted: Thu Mar 27th, 2008 03:07 am
10 th Post
wow a lot of emotions but I love it!!!!!!!!
It is difficult to give that variety of emotions in a poem!
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