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 Posted: Sat May 3rd, 2014 06:53 pm
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timmy
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My mother burned
when I was eight

I watched her skin dance—
a red-and-orange danse macrabre;
ashes-to-ashes now means
everything to me

The thing is—
of distance, age, and time,
which one closed first before she expired?

And most nights my pillow smells
of dust-to-dust when I dream
of her shriveling mouth,
and the voice that once sang
me to sleep as a child

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I'm not good at criticizing poetry as playwriting is my medium. I don't know how. I can only say. having lost my mother recently, this poem gave me a shiver that accentuated profoundly in the last 4 lines.

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