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 Posted: Mon Aug 24th, 2015 09:34 pm
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LAKESIDE
sometimes life feels
like an amusement park
closed too many years
paint chips on rotting wood
another pleasure leaves
a fun house no longer
a mountain of memories
left dying in quiet decay

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 Posted: Sun Aug 30th, 2015 08:47 am
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Killed me.

Read it several times over the days since you posted it.


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 Posted: Thu Sep 3rd, 2015 08:51 pm
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Love the title.

"another pleasure leaves" ...the line the whole poem turns on.

Wonderful.

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 Posted: Wed Mar 2nd, 2016 05:38 pm
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I am particularly fond of imagery, and yours elicited a visceral response.
‘paint chips on rotting wood’
I loved that line, and the next one as well.
Hardly an expert on poetry, but I know what I like and I enjoyed reading this very much. Thank you.

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