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 Posted: Fri Aug 4th, 2006 01:59 pm
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Edd



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Location: Denver, Colorado USA
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I'd take more time letting it unfold.  In an instant we learn that he's an educated guy.   I'd let the audience assume what they will at first - give them a chance to learn something about themselves.  I think you have a much longer play here.

By the way, I fixed your formatting.