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 Posted: Mon Aug 7th, 2006 06:31 pm
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CoreUpted

 

Joined: Tue Aug 1st, 2006
Location: StJohn, Antigua And Barbuda
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Mana: 
i know i'm taking massive and uncalled for liberties with someone elses work here, but i've written another verse for nikip's poem (is verse right?).

Starving Child,

when I picked up on your picture in the charity ad in the paper


and dropped you down my list of my priorities

I thought to myself

“Why can I only see the cliche?”

 

Why can I not see behind your eyes?

sorry. i accept this is probably a total crap addition (poet i'm not) and probably not PC and not even where nikip was going. also, i can't see straight - been underwater for about 16 hours of the last 36. need sleep. goodnight all (it's only gone noon here but i've been on 2 night dives).