View single post by RTurco
 Posted: Thu May 20th, 2010 08:29 pm
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Joined: Wed Nov 19th, 2008
Location: New Jersey USA
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Hello everyone!

I am quite pleased with all the responses I've been getting. In media res, I totally agree when you say that more knowledge of the craft should be gained in order to adequately deem a critique as useful or not.

Learn the rules and reconfigure/rethink them and implement your own vision effectively.

I like that a lot.


Now, to address questions directed at the play:

- There is a great deal of foreshadowing as to the protagonist's later state of insanity. In Act One, it seems that the conflict of familial relations is tearing his mind apart and pushing him towards the edge.

- There is only one form of hallucination that appears throughout the play: it is a vision of the protagonist's late brother. It is explicitly stated in stage directions that the hallucination is to move in a ghostly manner and even more so, that no one but the protagonist acknowledges its existence. The hallucination itself even subtly asserts that he exists solely in the protagonist's mind.

- This hallucination, while it does provide some commentary, has a primarily functional existence. It goads the protagonist into doing the unthinkable... It maliciously abuses the protagonist by twisting his words around to inflict feelings of guilt and hint at underlying motivations.

- The hallucination exists because of the protagonist's immense guilt upon the assassination of his brother. Maybe the protagonist is trying to fill the void his brother left as well? It is never explicitly stated why but the reason may be inferred or at least guessed at.

*Think of it almost like Willy Loman's hallucinations in Death of a Salesman.

Sometimes, I feel like the artist is not the best one to judge his work. Since he has crafted it and stayed with it from the beginning, he knows exactly what is deep under the surface; i.e. he needs a new pair of eyes to help him figure out what's what. Having said that, if anyone would like to take a look at the play, send me a private message with your email and I will get it to you shortly. (There is also an excerpt of the play on this forum, just search for the play's title, "The Red Crow" and you'll find it.)


Thanks for the feedback everyone,


Last edited on Sun May 23rd, 2010 07:38 pm by RTurco