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 Posted: Wed Aug 16th, 2006 12:15 am
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Interesting.  A little long, but fun in its rhyme and reason.

It sounds like a folk song.  Or maybe a country song.  Or more likely a song in a play or musical.

Reminds me of someone.  I'm not sure who. 

Hmmm.  Maybe Kal.??

Shorten it, find a chorus, give it a melody, make it a little more subtle and it's definitely a song.  Voltaire said, "Anything too silly to be said should be sung."  Sounds like that might qualify.  Not sure I can imagine a character saying it, but I can imagine one singing it.  Especially if more inuendos and subtlty was used.

In fact, it could be hilarious.

SD

Last edited on Wed Aug 16th, 2006 12:26 am by scenedreamer