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 Posted: Sat Apr 16th, 2011 04:05 pm
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Edd



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Mana: 
You have written a potentially perfect cover letter, in my opinion, as I might write one, but I would cut almost all of the first paragraph.

"Please find enclosed an excerpt of “I Love You, Too” for submission to Theater J. I have also enclosed a synopsis, resume, and SASE for confirmation of receipt.

Then I would jump to the synopsis. It's short and sweet. The synopsis contained in the first paragraph is redundant to the "synopsis" itself. Again, as I always must emphasize, that is how I would do it. I do not believe the reader, often an intern, needs that much information. It might not be to your benefit.

Anna, I love your synopsis. It's short and to the point.

One more point that just occurred to me: If you say "enclosed" then it is enclosed only. Which would be better for the reader since your letter may not, and probably not, be passed on to the readers.

Only the best,
Edd

Last edited on Sat Apr 16th, 2011 04:24 pm by Edd