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 Posted: Thu Feb 2nd, 2012 01:27 am
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Michael Morris

 

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Mana: 
I've been thinking on some of your points some more the last few days. "we look upon this" can change to "we look at this thing" -- same beat count, less sophisticated which works better for Pamela. Cat however is just fine - as I mentioned earlier she's an English major.

As for the "Right now they just spill each other's hearts out to each other right off the bat" -- that's bothered me a bit. I mean, this is by format a 10 minute play. Within this play I don't have much space for any exposition. I have done more with these characters in other plays - but is that detracting from this play when weighed by its own merits somehow?