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 Posted: Wed May 30th, 2012 02:37 am
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Allan_West



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Thanks for all the feedback! It is great to hear what I cannot see with my own eyes.

I was fighting over the guards, but I like the fact that they can start as just a chorus then perhaps come into the story later. It's good to get a break from the intense too with their laid-back style.

It is pretty loose all around, but I'm not surprised with one of my first drafts, haha. It's always hard to avoid new-age idioms when dealing with a historical work. And you're right about the 'definitely', I blame spell-check!

Again, thanks for the feedback! If you have works that need a pair of eyes, let me know.

I will try and upload the second act as soon as possible (It's getting close).