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 Posted: Thu Jan 31st, 2013 12:52 pm
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grinderwriting



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Glad I could help...

If the play isn't meant to be a comedy then why not get rid of the opening in Hell altogether? If you want to deal with weighty issues like self-discovery and the wages of sin then I think the fantasy element might be working against you, especially at the beginning of the play. You might get an audience to buy something like that towards the end of the play - a climax-inducing "judgement" scene, but to start off there is the stuff of comedy. In fact, it's almost a stock device - I think I've seen a few Bugs Bunny cartoons that start off that way.

Now I do have to admit that I'm looking at this from a non-religious point-of-view. If you're writing from a theological standpoint for a church-based audience then maybe starting off the play in Hell does make sense. But as I read in someone else's critique of another person's play on here you can run into real trouble when you use a play just to teach a lesson - it starts to sound like a public service announcement, or in your case, a sermon. It's not that there can't be a lesson in the play, it's just that it can't be at the expense of the dramatic intent.

Good luck and keep writing!