View single post by jjrasm
 Posted: Tue Feb 10th, 2015 06:29 am
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jjrasm

 

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I think you have the start of something quite funny. I would encourage you to consider your diction. There isn't much variation between characters and it feels very modern. Differentiating your characters would greatly improve it. I think you should also consider when your piece takes place. I think slightly revising your diction could improve your play. Also, I think you could have more fun with malaprops in the beginning.