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 Posted: Thu Jul 20th, 2017 06:50 am
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in media res

 

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Anna,

This needs a some work.

But, the "story" is very interesting! I like it. Could be quite powerful.

I would consult with your instuctors for more.

Advice: Triple proof-read out loud. You need some paragraph separations.

Example: "who have been through" should read "Who has been through."

Believe me, the smallest mistake in a first contact letter can doom the writer, because it is your introduction to their theatre, as it shows a lack of attention to detail.

Best,

IMR