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 Posted: Mon Mar 26th, 2018 07:37 pm
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Hi, Jeremy. Since I haven't had any plays work-shopped or produced, I don't feel I have much useful help to give you, because I'm not familiar with--or sure of--what theatre producers are looking for in play submissions, but I can try.

The first thing that jumped out at me was the fact that, in the beginning, Amber says, "Your name is John, right?" Well, the play also said that John didn't know them and that there were several conversations going on. So, I'm wondering how she knew his name in the first place, since they didn't know each other.

Also, wow! What a realistic second scene! It actually was uncomfortable for me to read because it brought back memories. However, I don't know whether theater producers are looking for realistic scenes like that, though, even though it's true to life, because even though I've tried toning down my characters expressing anger or violence to that level, without swearing, in order to make it less uncomfortable or scary and more family friendly (because I'm aware that some theaters are looking for more light-hearted, comedic plays), they still weren't interested in my work.

I think it might also be a little difficult for others to critique your play and give advice on the plot, characters, etc. without knowing the rest of the play, because it's possible that beginning scenes that might look unimportant might turn out to be, later on in the play.

I'm sorry I couldn't give more helpful advice. It's the best I could do with what little knowledge I have in this industry.

Last edited on Mon Mar 26th, 2018 07:46 pm by noviceplaywright