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 Posted: Mon Apr 30th, 2018 03:22 am
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timmy

 

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This could do with some names, methinks, Potabasil. The pronouns are a bit overwhelming.

"He was dead on the radio" is a great line. Your compassion in the writing is evident, as usual. I enjoyed reading this.