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 Posted: Thu Apr 25th, 2019 04:37 pm
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Paddy



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It's interesting. There's a lot going on.

Really liked this line...

MICHELLE. I don’t think I’ve ever not seen a smile on your face.

DAD. I guess that’s because every single time you’ve seen me I was looking at you.

It's technically very challenging for a one-act, and I hate to say, but this feels like film - not stage. I'm not sure how much we'd connect with characters that are ignoring a screaming lady having a baby feet from them.

Good dialogue, but honestly - I just think the story is too convenient. The letter just after Michelle admits she feels the same way, while a baby is being born.

All that said, I might be completely wrong - I have been before.

Thanks for sharing.

Paddy