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 Posted: Sat Nov 3rd, 2007 03:08 pm
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Proboscisbunny



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Mana: 
This is what my instinct tells me. It's a great idea, but the way you have it it's too long and difficult to follow. I don't want to work (I'm quoting feedback I've received myself ;) Just give them a taste - pun intended ;) And don't give away the end!

I loved the "Add D.J. to the mix" line, but thought the second half "for more questionable results" was you commenting on your work, putting it in a bad light. Let them make their own judgements - they will!

It sounds like a fun pay! Have a fun synopsis to match it! Great thinking...

Vanessa

 

CHURCH BASEMENT LADIES CASSEROLE COOK-OFF
SYNOPSIS
By Toni Wilson

Cook Time: 37 minutes

Description: The arrival of the new pastor causes a great romantic stir in the Church Basement Ladies group. Each woman attempts to get her daughter to be seen as a romantic interest for him, with questionable results.


Ingredients:

3 Church Basement Ladies and their daughters.

1 Church Basement Ladies President and her son.

1. New, young, handsome and single pastor, Pastor Ray

Dashes of dreams - marrying a pastor, becoming a nurse, a nun and a chocolatier



Directions.

1. Mix.

2. Add D.J. to the mix.

3. Repeat step one.

4. Bake at 425 degrees until top is golden brown and insides are creamy and hilarious.