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 Posted: Fri Mar 21st, 2008 02:57 pm
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Not to be out done by his Mother, My son Eoghan just dictated his poem to me
So go easy on him, he's only Five

The Mermaids

By the Irish Sea
Was a Mermaids dive
with the stars and the moon

And Gillian was standing by the Ocean
With the Mermaids on top of the rock
By the Ocean

And the birds go tweet tweet tweet
Where the cottages go by the sea

(C) Eoghan Murphy
Age 5
March 2008

Under no circumstances is this poem to be copied without the prior permission of Master Eoghan Murphy


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Oh those Irish!  So young they've got the gift. 

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I don't know but I think it's grand, five or fifty! If only I could capture that same lyrical confidence, so without artifice.

Now tell me, how do you pronounce his name?



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So today 4th September 2012 Eoghan is being home schooled and we did Robert Frost this morning. I told Eoghan that when he was very young he wrote a poem and I showed him his poem here on Stageplays and himself and his sister are rolling around the floor laughing especially about "And the birds went tweet tweet"

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Given the age of the young Master Murphy, it immediately brought to mind one of my favorite poems of all time - and I would say I would say it compares favorably with - "Dover Beach" by Matthew Arnold.

Such purity...with no fuss. Not a wasted word.

http://www.poetryfoundation.org/poem/172844

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September is going out and we finished the Poem by Robert Frost. "After Apple Picking"
I took the kids apple picking Thursday. I think they got it.

They read it, they read it out loud, they wrote the words down for spelling test, they wrote the whole poem down, they took it upstairs and read it at bedtime for the Da without prompting, they took it to DC on their field trip without my asking

One month. One poem


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I read "After Apple Picking" at a Memorial Service about 10 years ago in honor one of my dearest theatrical friends. He knew "All Things Apples." 350 people gathered. Sweetest man I have ever known. He could wax on about apples and their intimate intricacies and variabilities, along with many other seemingly trifles in life that were really the essential "stuff" of life.

Not a dry eye in the house.

We bonded/cemented for life when I directed him in "Spoon River Anthology" working on the piece "Conrad Siever."

http://www.poetryfoundation.org/poem/175187


He went on for about an hour about how much it meant in the poem to mention Northern Spy apples, rather than some other apple. Steve Jobs, now that he's gone, might even be proud!

In fact the book I gave him in 1979, "All About Apples" by Alice A. Martin, sits proudly upon my bookshelf today. Inscribed at the time thusly:

Dear Glenn,

"To one from whom I've learned a lot about keeping my apples red!

Keep Ripening!"

Love,

moi



Till he died 22 years later, we exchanged Christmas gifts that had something to do with apples.

Hard to bite into an apple without thinking of him.


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I wouldn't mind sitting in on one of your poetry classes ;)

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Yes and I wouldn't mind Timmy if you enrolled as a substitute for the Poetry class one day.
They will continue in October with Frost and visit his farm when the Da gets his act together. It's about twenty mins from here.
There is so much around here to do at this time of the year the Autumn.

I also introduced them to TS Eliot
They love the cat poems
Eoghan just loves Bustopher Jones

Learning meself as I'm teaching

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