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Hope it raises a laugh and that Aussies don't take it too personally

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Henry Morgan,

Boody Albo's has been downloaded ten times, so is no longer available.  I would like to read it.  Please consider yourself contacted and respond accordingly.

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Paul,
 
Here and there it seemed a bit wordy, but I was laughing at those times.
 
The plot seems predictable and the points obvious, but it moves effortlessly in diverse unforeseeable directions.  Of course, I was laughing at the time.
 
The characters are stereotypes:  people doing what we do as individual as we allow ourselves to be, even the unseen "dunkeys".  Of course, I was laughing at the time.
 
The dialogue of attenuated cliché serves the predictable, unforeseeable, stereotypical individuals well.  Of course, I was laughing at the time.
 
Turning the table, calling it a desk and declaring that a change of scene! A tiny play within the play! So often done and seldom noticed! Of course, I was laughing at the time.
 
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Thanks MA,
It appears you were laughing at everything,so I've perhaps achieved one of my objectives.

Yes it's rude,sledgehammer,stereotypical cliches in order to put across what I consider to be serious social issues.The whole point of this little romp is the absurdities and powerlessness of us as individuals and the way we assuage our guilt in thinking the word "sorry" clears us of misdeeds.

I'm at a bit of a loss in understanding how you think my stereotypical characters can be unforseeable yet also predictable but I'm sure you know what you meant.

Please don't take that as criticism as I'm very grateful for your feedback.

Regards Paul

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Thanks Kurt,
One of your famous newspapermen once said "publish and be damned" and to a certain extent I empathise with the sentiment.
I'm flattered with your comparison of my work but am certainly not the heroic type. If I need to leave the country in a hurry,can I stay with you??
I mentioned that I didn't want Aussies to take it too personally,however,a little bit personally would be fine.

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Kurt,perhaps we'll have to escape to Tristan da Cunha
and write what we want from there
I'm sure the Tristan da Cunha Playhouse and St Helena Repertory would perform our work to an audience of penguins.(although they can be pretty fierce)

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