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 Posted: Sat Jan 30th, 2010 07:52 pm
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Woke up yesterday morning (1/30/10)from a dream where I was writing a monologue with the title 21 TODAY. I even dreamed most of the story and most of the story remained after I awoke. So here it is, the first draft of a snappy little monologue. I expect it to, at least, double before I'm finished. Enjoy, Edd

P.S. (2/2/10) Now it is finished.


21 TODAY
A monologue
Edward Crosby Wells


The CHARACTER is a young man who can easily be taken for twenty-one. He should be charming and likeable. He is surrounded in dark, addressing the audience.


I’m a regular guy. Regular things . . . sports, football, baseball, the ladies. I’m a regular lady killer, know what I mean? I watch my share of TV, but I’m no couch potato. I eat fast food, sometimes to excess, have a beer every now and again, but never to excess and I’m into cars. Regular guy stuff, know what I mean? I’m really into traveling, seeing what there is to see, meeting folks along the way . . . especially the ladies.

Drove coast to coast in my Jeep exploring the wonders of America. Lots of wonders out there . . . New York City . . . not as bad as you heard. Disney World, not as good as you heard. The mighty Mississippi . . . big, but mighty muddy. The Rio Grande’s not a river at all. Not by a long shot . . . a trickling stream, if you was to ask me. Las Vegas . . . that was a whole lot like Disney World, but with a lot of hookers. The Grand Canyon . . . that’s a big hole in the ground, but it’s pretty grand alright. And L.A., the City of Angels. If there be angels in Las Angeles they’re not from where most people think they’re from. You know, from upstairs. They’re the other kind, from another place altogether, if you know what I mean.

So, here’s the big news: Twenty-one today. A magic number, huh? Twenty-one. I like the sound of that. Sure seemed to take a long time. It takes a lot of years when you go to adding them up. Know what I mean? And all the stuff you’ve got to get through to make it from there to here.

There are so many moments in a life you can never forget no matter how hard you try. They don’t let loose. They’re like scars. You look at them and you remember how you got every one of them. There’s no forgetting. Nope. They’re there and they never go away. The most indelible scars, those fucked up moments in your life, are the ones you come face to face with when somebody close to you dies . . . somebody you care about. You don’t ever forget those moments. They’re tattooed deep beneath the skin, those moments of death. They’re always right there, staring you right in the face. Scars.

For instance, my mother. My mother and her fucking enemas. Fucking enemas. That’s funny, isn’t it? I mean, it’s funny when you come to think about it, if you know what I mean. Aint nobody that constipated. What the hell was she looking for? You’d think I’d swallowed gold nuggets or gold plated Cheerios or something. We all have our quirks, our little eccentricities, don’t we?

I hadn’t yet reached puberty when I got my first taste of death . . . my mother, the enema lady. You can be sure you’ll never forget that sweet and pungent smell associated with death . . . the perfume of flowers mingling with the unmistakable odor of dead flesh into one overpowering scent. It stunk up the air in the parlor filled with strangers I never saw before and some family I never saw before, and they were all in mourning . . . all with their great big phony crocodile tears. People . . . they treat you like shit when you’re alive and the minute you bite it they go all mushy and teary-eyed . . . then they go home, watch a little TV, go to bed, get up the next day and they can’t remember your face or where they met you or who you were or why you were in their life in the first place. Just another day in Deadwood. You can’t help but love them, can you? No man’s an island, right? Some of the best times I ever had involved people. What are you going to do without them, huh? You can’t eat them, so you might as well love them.

So, there they all were wearing their solemn faces and such when somebody came up from behind and escorted me to the coffin to kiss my mother goodbye. Well, I didn’t want to kiss that corpse, who the hell would? The hands that administered the enemas lay crossed upon her bosom. No way was I going to kiss them. Suddenly, a fat ham hock of a hand forced my head to bend and my lips to press hard upon her cold, waxen cheek . . . and there it was. There was that smell, sweet and pungent. Nobody is going to forget a thing like that. Nobody . . . and I can guarantee it. There’s no forgetting decay.

After her death I went to live with my grandparents ‘cause the old man was still in the army. They were good people, my grandparents. They tried to love me, but they never quite got ‘round to it. I figure they never really felt it deep in that place that makes it real. You see, they couldn’t accept that my mother committed suicide. They refused to believe it and so they could never bring themselves even close to saying the word “love” when it came to me. Not once did they ever say that word. I guess I was a constant reminder of what they wanted to bury in the back of their thoughts and so, at best, I became an object of their ambivalence. What the hell, love’s nothing but a word used so often, over and over, it no longer means a thing . . . just another four letter word. But, we cry waiting for somebody to say it anyway.

Two weeks after the old lady went to greener pastures, if you believe in that kind of stuff, the old man was discharged from the army. That man would sooner kick you in the head than rub it. He really got off on torturing me. Tied me up, beat me up and bloodied me up. No respect for kids, if you know what I mean. I sure as hell don’t know what made him so cruel, but he was one mean sonofabitch. So getting his comeuppance wasn’t a surprise or a sad affair to anybody. He must have really rubbed somebody the wrong way ‘cause his battered body with its smashed-in face not even a mother could recognize was found less than half a mile from the house . . . down by the watercress pond. Anyway, he was beaten to death with the bloody rock the police found a few feet from his body. His killer was never found. They looked alright, but he hasn’t yet been found. And that’s how I became acquainted with death and the smell of it.

Love, too, has a smell of its own. There was a blond girl with emerald eyes in junior high. One fall day after school she lured me down to the brook where the high school kids went to smoke during lunch hour. Nobody ever went there after school. Said she had something to show me. I told her I had something to show her too. She smelled like bubble gum and soap, yet her skin tasted like salt and freshly mowed grass. I know, ‘cause . . . well, I don’t have to tell you, do I? And her eyes . . . oh boy, those eyes . . . wide and unblinking, trying to figure me out, I guess. Her watery eyes with tiny golden flecks sparkled in the light of the setting sun as I watched her watching me. She was twelve. That’s another magic number, isn’t it?

Anyway, where was I? Oh, telling you about love. Years later love was in a clearing in the woods behind the old tire factory, long since closed and boarded up. The raven-headed girl lay on the ground silently as my hands reached under her dress and pushed her legs apart. She was trembling and she started to cry, but willing . . . maybe she was scared. You can never tell about a thing like that. This was all new to her and she wasn’t sure what was going to happen next. You could smell the blood between her legs . . . like rusty iron. And the taste . . . tinny. It’s a taste you don’t forget. She was fifteen.

Year after year passed on my way to twenty-one and the girls became more frequent. The years were filled with the scent of sweet breath, peaches, moss, straw, cheap perfume and the tinny taste that lingers and, if only in the mind, never quite goes away.

All the girls had their own scent. That’s how I remember each and every one of them. Every now and again I catch a whiff of déjà vu.

The girl without a smile, with the twisted foot and braces, was the saddest of all. I don’t think anybody had ever touched her before. She gave herself over to me as if I were an angel come to save her . . . to take her away to a fairy castle and love her forever after. I like the thought of me being an angel, but I know better. Anyway, it didn’t turn out that way. No castle, I couldn’t save her and no love forever after. Fantasies and dreams of forever after never do come true, do they? I felt her sadness and pain and I almost told her that I loved her and, even though I did, I couldn’t bring myself to it. She smelled like medicine . . . like the smell of a hospital room where a body lays waiting to be discovered. She was twenty.

Finally, late last night, early morning really, there was the tattooed girl who reeked of beer, urine, sweat and crack. What a shame. How does a person fall that far? What causes a person to care so little for themselves? She stumbled out the bar and I saw that she needed somebody to comfort her, to give her a sense of worth, but when I tried she ran like a wounded rabbit . . . screaming all the while, trying to get away, but she never did. They never do. When I caught up with her in the stench of the alley I grabbed hold of her . . . offered her my arms . . . and with a gripping embrace and a quick twist of her neck until you could hear it snap . . . breathlessly, her head fell forward . . . her dead body went limp and I let it fall to the ground. Then I shoved it into a dumpster and closed the lid. She was number twenty-one . . . twenty-one today.

Well, that’s the story of my life. I’m just a regular guy who loves the ladies. Would you repeat that back to me?

“Regular guy, honest, dependable, never lies, loves moonlit walks, sports, traveling and good times, looking for same to share mutual interests. Willing to relocate for the lady of his dreams and to kill her with kindness.”

That’ll run in tomorrow’s classifieds, right? What? No . . . that’s it. Nothing else. Thank you very much.


(Perhaps "Young Girl" by Gary Puckett & The Union Gap or, perhaps, "Go Away Little Girl" by Donny Osmond, and various other artists, plays as the darkness closes in on the man.)


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Loved it! Enjoyed the twist towards the end too.

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Thank you, RTurco.

Well, Since the original posting I've rewritten it substantially and have almost doubled it. I'm going to let it sit awhile and think about it.

I love to play with graphics for each of my plays. I've attached the one for this.

Should any of you have any ideas or suggestions, I'm certainly open to them.

Thanks,
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edd,

Now there is a dream!

Liked this a lot. And when the comes at its moment, everything prior makes absolute sense. I am also going to PM you on some things.

best,

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P.S. I edited my comment as I did not want to ruin the reading pleasure for others.

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I've just reposted today's rewrites. I'm exhausted and ready to go to bed . . . perchance to dream another . . .

~Edd

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I really liked. There is nothing like a play with a twist at the end. It had a great aha moment right at the end.

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Thank you to all who have taken the time to read my little monologue. I made the last changes this morning (2/2/10), put a ribbon on it and tied a bow. The completed version is also on my website: http://www.edwardcrosbywells.com/21

Thanks for following it through its many mutations. Time to move on.


~Edd

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Have enjoyed the write through, Edd. This is terrific.

If you get a chance, check out a short story by Stephen King "Strawberry Spring"

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