For me, the point of a "calling card" is to access the pertinent information quickly. I watched 1 minute and 14 seconds of the video, and still have no idea what your play is about. In fact, the credits for the 8 minute teaser had not yet concluded after the one minute mark.
Maybe something organized more like a Hollywood teaser, with some action up front and the credits coming last, might get you more of what you seek?
That's my reaction after spending one valuable minute of time watching.
The quality of the intro was better than the snippet of the play I watched. You set us up for some good production values with the intro. But when we got to the play,which is the point of the whole project, they weren't. (Why such a long intro? Who cares? We want to see the play.)
RE: production values: I could not really hear the dialogue. By videoing a live performance you give up way too much: good sound, good video (with theatrical - not video lighting) and so many other things I will not take the time to mention. We are watching the backs of the heads of the audience! I watched about 2 minutes.
If you want to get an idea of how these can be done go here and browse.
It is a company called The Stage Channel out of Chicago. They have been doing it about 10 years. They have improved a lot since their beginnings and always still keep improving.
They do not shoot a live performance, they shoot a rehearsal specifically set up for them to do their taping. Sound is great. Light is great. Their shooting and editing is thought out very well. Mind you, they are a professional company.
However, with the inexpensive equipment available today, you could certainly get something much better than what you have posted on youtube. I have seen some very good videos from people that are not professional.
Hope this helps for the next time. It is a goal to shoot for. This is the quality people expect in this technological age.
To be direct: Right now, your script would speak better as an intro than this video. 10 page sample and a synopsis.
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P.S. By the way, a play about/built around Nessie sounds like a lovely idea. Everyone loves Nessie. I wish you the best with it.
Thanks very much for that - I was so into the whole production of the play it was really difficult to step out and see what the filming, albeit amateurish, said to other people.
The play itself garnered grand reviews and is doing well, the 'sequel' going into production this July. What I hoped I was doing, was to convey the funny clips from it so people can see we entertain an audience.
Everything you've both said makes perfect sense. The intro is obviously a mistake, and I can see that now - ta very much for the heads up.
I suppose it is indicative of where we currently are, and justifies it's place on our website. Having said that, the idea of pointing influential people towards it may be folly.