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 Posted: Sat Apr 16th, 2011 02:52 pm
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Anna202
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I'd appreciate any suggestions you may have for this--I've never done this before
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Please find enclosed an excerpt of “I Love You, Too” for submission to Theater J. I have also enclosed a synopsis, resume, and SASE for confirmation of receipt. “I Love You, Too” follows Anna, a young Jewish woman, along on her visit to her parents’ house for a comedic exploration of her relationship with her mother. Anna’s mother, an Eastern European immigrant, maintains remnants of a childhood characterized by deprivation, political repression, and criticism. She wants the best for her daughter, whose very different immigration experience—that of a child trying to fit in, rather than an adult trying to survive—shaped a distinct personality that her mother does not know how to read. Anna’s conversations with her parents and friends explore not only her coming into her own, having absorbed some and deflected other elements of her parents’ heritage, but also some universal elements of modern life, including the cultural and generational gaps around social issues, food politics, and consumption.
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As Anna spends the holidays with her parents and her friends in Boston, her mother (lovingly) points out that she’s gained weight, comments on what and how she eats, and critiques her personality. Anna uses the week to explore her appreciation and love for and simultaneous frustration with her mother, her journey toward self-acceptance, and the non-traditional yet not atypical family lives of her friends.

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 Posted: Sat Apr 16th, 2011 03:05 pm
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Mana: 
You have written a potentially perfect cover letter, in my opinion, as I might write one, but I would cut almost all of the first paragraph.

"Please find enclosed an excerpt of “I Love You, Too” for submission to Theater J. I have also enclosed a synopsis, resume, and SASE for confirmation of receipt.

Then I would jump to the synopsis. It's short and sweet. The synopsis contained in the first paragraph is redundant to the "synopsis" itself. Again, as I always must emphasize, that is how I would do it. I do not believe the reader, often an intern, needs that much information. It might not be to your benefit.

Anna, I love your synopsis. It's short and to the point.

One more point that just occurred to me: If you say "enclosed" then it is enclosed only. Which would be better for the reader since your letter may not, and probably not, be passed on to the readers.

Only the best,
Edd

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 Posted: Sat Apr 16th, 2011 03:38 pm
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Thanks!

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 Posted: Mon Apr 18th, 2011 07:36 pm
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Mana: 
One thing you could add is a sentence or two about why the theater would want to produce it. Why their audiences will love it. Which means you have to research the theater a little, find out what they do and what their mission is. But the Web makes that easy.

Artistic directors and literary managers are so swamped these days. You're more likely to get produced if you make it easier for them to know why your play fits what the theater does.

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 Posted: Mon Apr 18th, 2011 11:55 pm
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Thanks, Louise.  I was going back and forth about that--I think a paragraph would be too much but a sentence might be just right.

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 Posted: Tue Apr 19th, 2011 01:31 pm
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Remember to tell them in every cover letter:  why THIS theatre?  why THIS play?

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