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 Posted: Sun Jan 1st, 2012 09:25 pm
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Read this earlier in the day.

100% with timmy.

And Happy New Year to one and all.

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 Posted: Sun Jan 1st, 2012 05:29 pm
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Thanks Timmy
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Happy New Year also to you

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 Posted: Sun Jan 1st, 2012 04:36 pm
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Your second stanza is exquisite...

"you're" (line 2) :)

"to put" (line 3) :)

Have a great and Happy New Year...

timmy

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I can't sleep
you're on my mind
the way you used
to put your forefinger and thumb
between your lips
when you had something
on your mind

The years have gone by
why did you die?
you had so much on your mind
tell me why

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