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 Posted: Mon Jan 9th, 2012 04:36 am
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THE RED HAT


I bought the red hat when I saw the red hat

In the window

Before you saw the red hat

The red hat

With a turned-up brim

In the window of the shop

At 69th and Columbus

It cast a hook into my eye

And reeled me through the door

Then you saw the red hat

Without me saying a thing

And smiled

As I knew you would

And tried on the red hat

And you looked in the mirror

And you looked at me

Over your shoulder

With the slightly sucked-in cheeks

Of a Vogue cover model

And you knew you were beautiful in the red hat

And I knew you were beautiful in the red hat

As I knew you would be beautiful in the red hat

Just before the moment the hook

Ensnared my eye

That crisp October Sunday afternoon

And we were happy

Because we both loved the red hat

And we floated home on Columbus Avenue

And I didn’t care about my lighter wallet

And we looked in shop windows

And laughed at our reflections

Each wrapped in each other's arms

And of you beautiful in the red hat


We got home on 74th

And made love and...made love again

Whenever a memory casts your face

Into the corner of my eye

And won’t let go

And reels me in

I think of you and the red hat and that sunny October day

In New York City

Do you?

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 Posted: Tue Jan 10th, 2012 03:07 am
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I love location poems. I love NYC poems. I love this poem. I've been on 69th and Columbus. I was again. Woody Allen...Irwin Shaw....would be proud.

This is such a nice, nice love poem, I'm not sure why, even if you actually thought such a thought, you would insert that thought of doubt with the last line. Get rid of it. Leave me with all the "lovey/dovey" stuff that this poem has to offer.

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 Posted: Thu Jan 12th, 2012 03:58 am
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Love it, just love it
I'm a Hat lady
always loved hats

Never had a Red Hat though


Going to NY end of January
me thinks I'm going to visit Konin
and get me a Red hat

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 Posted: Mon Mar 19th, 2012 04:14 pm
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I enjoyed this a lot.

I stop by the forums only rarely, and always find something new that I like :)

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