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 Posted: Mon Feb 27th, 2012 11:54 pm
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RTurco
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I'm posting the first scene of my latest play, titled "Tradimento" (Italian for "Betrayal"), for review. Contact me if you want to read more than what's posted. Enjoy and critique if you like! BUT VIEWER DISCRETION IS ADVISED.

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Tradimento
A Play by
Raymond Turco


Principal Characters

Giancarlo - in his 20’s.
Grazia - in her 20’s.
Giovanni – Grazia’s boyfriend, in his 20’s.
Marco - The leader of the fascist party MSI and later NAR member.
A Communist
A Fascist - Doubles as “A Recruiter”.
Maria
Two Policemen


Place- Various places in some unnamed Italian city.
Time- the 1970s and ‘80s.
Set- Minimalistic, though with a dark, seedy atmosphere.



Tradimento
ACT I
SCENE 1

(Lights up a bare stage. Sirens whirring, guns firing, protestors shouting. A COMMUNIST PROTESTOR enters left and a FASCIST PROTESTOR enters right.)

COMMUNIST
Viva le Brigate Rosse! Viva il comunismo!

FASCIST
Viva l’Ordine Nuovo! Viva il Duce!

COMMUNIST
Fucking fascist.

(They fight. The COMMUNIST pulls a gun. The FASCIST pulls a knife. The FASCIST is shot and the COMMUNIST is stabbed. An ANNOUNCER sounds in from above.)

ANNOUNCER (VO)
The twelfth of December, 1969. A bomb explodes in Piazza Fontana’s National Agrarian Bank. Seventeen killed, eighty-eight wounded. Believed to be the work of radical anarchists. Giuseppe Pinelli is captured by police and mysteriously “falls” out of the fourth floor window of the Milan Police Headquarters during interrogation. But no one is ever proven guilty and the affair remains a mystery. (Pause) The next twenty-five years would see a rash of terrorist activity throughout Italy’s major cities, with para-military groups such as the Communist Red Brigades and the Fascist New Order planting bombs, staging assassinations and organizing riots that took the lives of over 2000. These are the anni di piombo, the “years of lead”, and terror is the order of the day.

(GIANCARLO’s apartment. It is small, modestly furnished with an old, rustic atmosphere. There is a gun hanging on the wall next to a portrait of a man in Fascist military uniform and a pistol on the bureau. GIANCARLO enters, with GRAZIA following close by.)

GIANCARLO
So here we are.

GRAZIA
Che bello.

GIANCARLO
It’s passable.

GRAZIA
I see you’re interested in the military.

GIANCARLO
In weaponry, yes. That’s my father pictured there.

GRAZIA
A fascist?

GIANCARLO
In so many words, yes.

GRAZIA
I see.

GIANCARLO
And that was his gun. And this his pistol.

GRAZIA
Fascinating.

GIANCARLO
I think so. You know most people resent the Fascists’ rule but I for one think that Mussolini did a lot for this country. Built it up. Strengthened it. Did you know he remodeled most of the roads and highways? Really aspired to take the country back to the glory days of Ancient Rome. Really wanted to improve the state. I’d say he succeeded. Not many can boast his achievements.

GRAZIA
Uh-huh. So you’re a fascist too?

GIANCARLO
Well… No. Not quite.

GRAZIA
I think you are. You sure look like one.

GIANCARLO
Oh?

GRAZIA
Eh sì. All you need is a black shirt. Black pants. A tie.

GIANCARLO
I’ve got plenty. Should I go put them on?

GRAZIA
Don’t. I might get a little hot.

GIANCARLO
What?

GRAZIA
Oh, you know I’m only joking. How long have we known each other, Giancarlo?

GIANCARLO
Since liceo, I suppose.

GRAZIA
That’s right. Exactly right. Over ten years. (Sighs) It’s so nice we could get together after so long…

GIANCARLO
And the film wasn’t half bad.

GRAZIA
Of course! You know anything with Mastroianni is going to be good.

GIANCARLO
Oh hey, and speaking of fascism… The film.

GRAZIA
That’s right. Mastroianni played an anti-fascist.

GIANCARLO
Wonderful movie.

GRAZIA
Yep.

(Pause.)

GIANCARLO
Mhmm. So what have you been up to since way back when?

GRAZIA
Not much. The usual.

GIANCARLO
Smoking and drinking?

GRAZIA
Sorry?

GIANCARLO
That’s my usual.

GRAZIA
Yeah, I guess it’s the same for me too…

GIANCARLO
So, are you into politics?

GRAZIA
Not really.

GIANCARLO
You have a boy in your life?

GRAZIA
Nope.

GIANCARLO
Ah. I see.

(GIANCARLO moves closer to GRAZIA. She recoils at first, but then moves closer to him.)

GIANCARLO (Cont’d)
Well?

GRAZIA
Well. This is nice.

GIANCARLO
Mhmm… Ehi Grazia.

GRAZIA
Sì?

GIANCARLO
Guess what I did a couple weeks ago.

GRAZIA
What?

GIANCARLO
I signed up.

GRAZIA
For?

GIANCARLO
Il movimento.

GRAZIA
Which one?

GIANCARLO
Which one do you think? Sociale.

(He gives the fascist salute.)

GRAZIA
So you are…

GIANCARLO
Yes.

GRAZIA
Oh.

GIANCARLO
(Seductively)
Viva… il… Duce.

(They kiss.)

GRAZIA
Wow.

GIANCARLO
Let me go get changed. Into my uniform.

GRAZIA
Yes.

(GIANCARLO exits. GRAZIA sits on the bed and prepares herself for lovemaking. GIANCARLO returns in a black shirt, and black pants. He opens his shirt slowly and pounces onto the bed on top of GRAZIA. They begin to make out.)

GIANCARLO
(In between kisses)
So… you… like… this…?

GRAZIA
Yes.

GIANCARLO
Turns you on?

GRAZIA
Yes.

GIANCARLO
A… symbol… of--?

GRAZIA
Power.

(GIANCARLO puts his hands all over GRAZIA. She moans in pleasure.)

GRAZIA (Cont’d)
Fuck me.

GIANCARLO
Eh?

GRAZIA
Fuck me, you big dictator.

GIANCARLO
Take off your clothes.

GRAZIA
Do it for me.

(He rips off her clothes and then proceeds to take off his.)

GIANCARLO
So I bet it’s your dream to be fucked up the ass by a blackshirt.

GRAZIA
How did you know?

GIANCARLO
One can tell. You exude a certain air.

GRAZIA
So do it. Take me. Ravish me. Now!

GIANCARLO
Demanding.

GRAZIA
You know it.

(GRAZIA lays herself out.)

GIANCARLO
And submissive. Just the way I like it.

(They engage in anal sex. Lights dim.)
(END OF SCENE)
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Contact me at raymondturco@yahoo.com if you want to read more!

RTurco

Last edited on Mon Feb 27th, 2012 11:55 pm by RTurco

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 Posted: Sat Mar 17th, 2012 09:14 pm
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"I think so. You know most people resent the Fascists’ rule but I for one think that Mussolini did a lot for this country. Built it up. Strengthened it. Did you know he remodeled most of the roads and highways? Really aspired to take the country back to the glory days of Ancient Rome. Really wanted to improve the state. I’d say he succeeded. Not many can boast his achievements"

I'd use more specific and interesting examples of the benefits of Fascist rule. "remolded the roads and highways" and "bring back the glory days" are a bit to vague I think.

Why did you put a graphic sex scene so early in the play before any sort of real tone has been established? It feels oftputting to have it so early, so sudden. Do you think it should be shown? It's already implied by the dialogue.

I would be engaged by this piece as an audience member and would want to keep watching.

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 Posted: Sat Mar 17th, 2012 09:46 pm
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Mana: 
Hmm. Maybe you're right about that sex scene. I think I'll tone it down just a bit, to passionate kissing instead. I think you're also right about that undescriptive blurb about Fascism. I'll spice it up a bit too. Thanks for the reply!

Interested in reading the rest?

Last edited on Sat Mar 17th, 2012 09:56 pm by RTurco

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