Hey there! This is my first post on this forum, and my first real attempt at playwriting outside of my drama class! I know it's not all that long, but I might still add more to it. Anyhow, any feedback is appreciated, especially related to developing the characters more!
I downloaded this and the formatting is all messed up. The lines stretch about 6 screens over and there's no line breaks, which makes it impossible to read. I'd reupload it, perhaps into a .doc or .docx file.
Hi, Jay. I know I'm supposed to do critiques as a "praise sandwich": something I liked; something I think needs improvement; something I like. But, to be honest, I didn't find anything I liked about this play. The characters are stereotypical and flat (The Hooker, The Pimp, The John, The Angry Mother), the situation demeaning to the alleged lead, and none of the characters grow in any way. Their lives are terrible, and then they get worse, and then one of them dies. The End.
Ask yourself: why are you telling this particular story? What do you want to say about these characters? What do you want the audience to think and feel about the play and its characters when it's over?
What *I* took away is: women are sluts; men are pigs; life sucks and no one can change it. If you're going for "slice-of-some-demoralized-hooker's-ruined-life", congratulations. But if I went to a short play festival and saw that piece, I would walk out, and I think a lot of other people would, too.