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This is perhaps a get to know the writing and humour and slant of each other.

Here's what you do.

1) Open one of your finished plays. Any length.

2) Post the first and last lines of the play here.

3) Find someone else's posting, and in seven bits of dialogue, fill in between the two lines.

Easy. Fun. Just play.

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Kat: Are you serious?

Sarah: I'm going to find you the best pussy ever!

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CAROL: This kind of thing ruins people.

JUNE: Have I got a story to tell you—!

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Okay - for farts and giggles, and to get it rolling.
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Kat: Are you serious?

Sarah: Dead serious. Serious as a heart attack. Serious as The Pope. Serious as a serial killer in June. Serious as my Uncle Micha about the loss of his left nut. Yeah, I'm serious.

Kat: Seriously?

Sarah: Serious as touching the third rail. Serious as my tongue on a blade. Serious as it is black. So wear it.

Kat: I... can't. Not -- I just can't.

Sarah: C'mon, it's hot. You'll look totally hot.

Kat: What if I get hot? What if I have to take it off? What then? I'll look ridiculous. I'll look. I'm not you. I'm just not you. Me? In this? With all the... zippers, and... oh, no, no, no.

Sarah: It's supposed to come off. Later. Come off slow.

Kat: It's just so, so, well? Vulgar.

Sarah: Vulgar? When have I ever been vulgar? I've never been vulgar in my whole entire life. Vulgar? It is my job. I am making this my duty. I'm going to find you the best pussy ever!

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Nice. I like that it's a bit obscure. I thought at first a Merkin, but no. Just a venus fly trap.

Thank you so much for playing.

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Kato, I love your dialogue. To my ears it was surprising and a complete "sudden" or "flash" play. Nice.

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Carol: This kind of thing ruins people.

June: Not if you're a man, it doesn't. Then it defines you.

Carol: Well, Mrs. Cleaver...

June: Hey! I hate when you do that! I don't make the rules, you know. Those same men that thirst for political power - thirst for other kind of power...if'n you know what I mean.

Carol: Yeah. I know what you mean. Fucking power.

June: No - the power of fucking. Different animal all together.

Carol: Women control the game before it starts. Then - - - nada. I bet he wasn't the only one to get caught with his pants around his ankles.

June: Not by a long shot. Did you hear about Crazy Joe and the contortionist from the circus?

Carol raises her eyebrows.

June: Have I got a story to tell you - !

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"Fucking power/power fucking"
Fucking brilliant. Love it, Paddy!

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Nice, Paddy. I thought about jumping in, but I seem to have lost confidence and imagination. Legalizing pot in Colorado may not have been a grand idea.

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Please, jump in. I need to know this is not just a site to check on the latest submission opps.

At the very least, post a first and last line.

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"Hey, lard ass, get it in gear."
"A flood!"

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Okay Edd (nice seeing you posting, BTW) -- here goes nuthin' --

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CHIP: Hey, lard ass, get it in gear.

ROLAND: (between heavy breaths) I'm coming... I'm coming. Is it uphill the whole way? And I thought we agreed
(big breath as he slows down, arriving beside Chip. He lets a strap from one side of his over-filled day-pack slip off a shoulder.)
--you'd lay-off the "lard-ass."

CHIP: We're not resting. Get that pack back on, tubby.

ROLAND: I'm resting. I'm hauling the equipment. It's heavy. We're high up. It's dry. Could use some water. The air's thin.

CHIP: Got more to do with your thick around the middle than the thin air.

ROLAND: Let's have some water. 'kay? Now?

(ROLAND slips the water bottle from the side of his pack. CHIP grabs it away,)

CHIP: You want some water? The water'll be at the top of the hill. Till then it's gonna be dry. Crack 'a your giant ass dry, got it? Got it?

ROLAND: LOOK--!
(ROLAND punches CHIP square in the nose. Blood pours out as CHIP hits the deck. ROLAND catches the bottle before it falls, winning it back.)
A flood!

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Where are they going? How big is the hill? In my strange mind, I did not see 'hill' and it was fun imagining them going up a mountain, or they live in San Francisco ...or a set of stairs.

Are they lovers - bad friends? Is Chip his boss, trainer?

I love that you don'g let us know things. I'm already learning something about your style.

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Thanks for posting it, Paddy. Have you used this exercise before in a class or a workshop?

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No. Just made it up. Trying to light a fire under people here.

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I might steal it and use it the next time I'm running a workshop. It's a good one that utilizes precision and decisiveness in a fast and accessible exercise.

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Well, I thought it was alway fun for the writer of the original lines. Like you know a secret....something. Steal away.

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That too! I was delighted reading your take on my two lines. Laughing like crazy, and surprised. It was a rocking fun read. :D

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CAROL: This kind of thing ruins people. Were he a woman he’d be a skank, bitch and a whore!

JUNE: (With an all-knowing smirk.) Well . . . the thing is . . . Carol . . . he’d still be a woman.

CAROL: Here we go. Another cause . . .

JUNE: Respect, June. Women are losing respect for themselves. And sometimes—

CAROL: —I forget my pills. I don’t do it on purpose.

JUNE: I wasn’t saying that. You lie around the apartment. When I come home I never. No. Never. I never know who—

CAROL: She’s gonna be tonight. I’ve heard it all before. Bipolar! It’s not my fault. I didn’t do anything to the sonofabitch. Punched me. In the face. In my fucking face, June.

JUNE: (Hugs her.) Shhh. I know. I know. It hurts. (Looking closely at her face.) Oh, baby. I can see his—

CAROL: No! You can’t. I have no more respect for them. Any of them! It’s not his punch, you know. He came onto me and when I told him he punched me. Why don’t they respect us? Forget it. That’s a silly question. They don’t even know—

JUNE: How to keep their zippers up. Hey, c’mon. I’ll make some hot cocoa while you go upstairs and—

CAROL: That’s why I was in Pleasures. I wanted some. You know. Toys.

JUNE: Run, run, run, Little Eliza. Get into the bed, you little wench!

CAROL: (Moving to exit.) Hey! It’s your turn tonight.

JUNE: Is it? Okay. Have I got a story to tell you—!

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Thanks Edd! Very cool. My favorite part "With an all-knowing smirk." Perfect.

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I'll post one more set, in case it cracks it open for anybody:


"There was a time when the world was Africa."

"Good to hear you sing."

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As we decend to the darker places. Nice, Edd. We three - like disturbing.

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She: There was a time when the world was Africa.

He: Yeah, well I’m Irish. What’s your fucking point?

She: I don’t know. Just wondering where the lion is when I really need it.

He: Male lions don’t do shit, didn’t you know? Just lay around and watch the girl
take down the weak.

She: Just my luck growing up with the lion from the “Wizard of Oz.”

He: Now you’re pissing me off.

She: Go ahead. Show me a little courage.

He: What’s the matter with you?

She: Just looking for a new song now and then.

He: The Lion Sleeps Tonight?

She: It would be good to hear you sing.

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"Will there be anything else?"

"God, the outright balls of some people."

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Nice, Timmy. Waiting for you to post the first and last of one of your plays.

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I put quotes around the two really close posted lines so you could tell ;)

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Very cool, Timmy. Very glad you joined in too!

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Here's my shot!

ACCUSED: Ow.

...

JUDGE: Good. I’m glad to hear it.

*It's one of my funnier works. :)

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For timmy

(ON THE MINNESOTA TWINS MOUND. Opening Day, APRIL 1, 2013 - date important.)

#58: Will there be anything else?

UMP: Yeah, let me see your glove.

#58: There’s nothing there.

UMP: I know you’ve got nothing there, so let me see your glove.

(Hands the glove to UMP. UMP feels around inside of the Glove.)

UMP: What’s this sticky stuff?

#58: You don’t want to know.

UMP: Looks like…you’ve been throwing some grease...

#58: You don’t want to know…

UMP: Oh, my god... What the...?

#58: I told you...you don’t want to know...

(Walking back to Home Plate. To self.)

UMP: Gonna be a long season. God, the outright balls of some people.


Best,

IMR

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Open up, do you hear me?

Then, let's get to work.



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#42: Open up, do you hear me?

#376: Get them pliers away from my mouth.

#42: Tweezers, Bozo.

#376: From here they look like a huge pair of pliers.

#42 cranks #376's mouth open, and there is a struggle as he dives into #376's mouth with a pair of tweezers. Finally...

#42: Got it! Jesus Christ. Acme Super Spy Recording Device, model # 2847593R!
It’s an an-fucking-tique! What is wrong with the other side? It's like they are living in the dark ages.

#376: Yes. And who would've thunk my dentist was one of them? Kind of cool 42…all this cloak and dagger, like them good old days. Recording devices, pens with poison ink, camera's in a flower tucked into the lapel.

#42: More like a clown in a circus than a spy. Let's get down to the high-tech business of spying. We all fired up?

#376: Yep.

They sit at their respective computers.

#376: 42 – you haven’t ‘liked’ my kitten of the day page yet.

#42: Shut up.

#376: You said you’d stop telling me to shut up.

#42: Piss off, then. Let’s get to work.

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Nice immediate leap, with such intrigue, Paddy!

When I was visiting a Set Designer friend in London in 1978, a spy killed a Bulgarian dissident by sticking him with an umbrella.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Georgi_Markov

Oddly, after the Iron Curtain fell, my friend got an honorarium to teach and exhibit in Bulgaria. And another friend of mine, Artistic Director of a major theatre here in the USA, returned from an exchange visit to Bulgaria.

The wonders we are witness to in a lifetime! And so seldom do theatre dramatists ever go near those kinds of topics. Or, at least they never/seldom get produced.

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Surely you remember Joe Niekro? (Phil's little brother)

He once had an episode (not w/the sticky stuff but w/an emory board) while pitching for the Twins. Thought of this after reading your lines.

Twins set for another l-o-n-g year :(


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I remember the emory board incident.

Those Niekro boys...I loved both of them.

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edd,

Yours builds into the beginning of a whole play, whether a one-act or full-length.

Write it for Chrisssakes.

Brilliant.


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Catiline: Welcome! Welcome! Good friends! Come now, sit!

Curius: And everything I see points to the black abyss.

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ACCUSED: Ow.

LAWYER: See? He is already over-emphasizing his injuries!

ACCUSED: I am not, that truly hurt.

JUDGE: That's enough sir, please refrain from interrupting.

LAWYER: I close today after building my strong case that the accused, here, did not slip on a saltwater taffy in my clients kiddy pool. He has made grand statements to their supposed courtship, but as you now have all have seen, he is no friend of my client. To even say he would be allowed out of his cage, to mingle with true people, especially near children, is outrageous.

ACCUSED: Who does this guy think he is! Look at my legs!

JUDGE [To the lawyer of the accused]: Tell your client to stop talking or I will have to confiscate his speech box.

LAWYER: He cannot even control himself in this courtroom! I hereby ask the jury to be smart, to be caring and thoughtful, and to put this shamed soul to death. And by death I mean to have him re-locked away in the barred room at his uncle's house. And that he may only be allowed to see people on Christmas, and perhaps Boxing Day.

LAWYER OF ACCUSED: I agree!

ACCUSED: What!

LAWYER: Ha!

LAWYER OF ACCUSED: I need to go feed the meter, I rest on everything.

ACCUSED: This is ridiculous!

LAWYER: Okay, we are done here, next case.

JUDGE: Good. I’m glad to hear it.

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Awesome, Allan! It's eerily similar to the original.

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Thanks Turco! I've been trying to refresh my comedic edge and this is just the thread to do it in! It was fun! :P

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Been away from here for a bit. Hope I can play?

Here goes...

Open up, do you hear me?

NO!

Look open the door, its now or never!

I don't want to!

It has to be now, you know I am right.

I am not sure I am ready.

You are as ready as you will ever be, now open up.

Ok but be gentle.

I will be, I love you.

Here I am, I am ready now.

Then, let's get to work.

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Sales Assistant 1: "Will there be anything else?"

Customer:"Yes have you got something my size in red?"

Sales Assistant 2:(Sotto voce)"Yes an air balloon."

Sales Assistant 1:"If Madame would like to follow me"

Customer:"Something that doesn't make me look fat"

Sales Assistant 2:(Sotto voce)"A Sherman tank?"

Customer:"God, the outright balls of some people."

Could have written more but had to go! Anyone wanna finish?

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Fun. I think the second would could go on and on and on.

Nice playing.

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Leia: It's like it feels like this... Oh! I am love! I am light! I feel everything!
I'm going out like a shooting star!

Leia: Until that day.





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Catiline: Welcome! Welcome good friends! Come now sit. We did not have the weather we were hoping for today!

Curius: You can tell by the lightning knocking out the lighting

Catiline: yes it's not ideal. We probably shouldn't use naked flames but the marquee can't go to waste just because the generator also packed up.

Curius:I knew the 6th of the 6th of 06 was a bad day or a wedding

Catiline: It's the 16 th!

Curius: Well Nancy and Sidney didn't get married in a church 10 days ago I suppose

Catiline: It's not your turn to speak yet, I haven't even introduced you

Curius: they all know me

Catiline: cheeky sod. OK, May I present the best man,,,

Curius: I've known Nancy and Sidney for about two decades and so far everything I've seen points to the black abyss.

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Kat: Are you serious?

Sarah: Yes, it’s true, you've been found out.

Kat: What gave me away?

Sarah: Well, to begin with, you do have a penis.

Kat: It’s always the small things that gives one away isn’t it?

Sarah: And now that the world knows what are you going to do?

Kat: I’m considering reverting back. Can you help me do that?

Sarah: I’m going to find you the best pussy ever!

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Richard Porter. Well...welcome back.

Nice take on the two lines.

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Okay.  I'll give this a shot.  Here are the first and last lines of my new 10 minute play.   



ANTHONY: Hi, Roger.  Am I interrupting?

ROGER:    Tell them I'll be right out, Maggie.  I just need a minute to get myself ready.



- Jim C

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And here is my attempt at SERVICESPIRIT'S:

- Jim C.

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Leia:     It's like it feels like this... Oh! I am love! I am light! I feel everything!
             I'm going out like a shooting star!

Daniel:  I’m right here, baby.  Can you feel my hand?

Leia:     Embracing the moon… my solstice… my Chanticleer

Daniel:  Where is she?  She’s so far away…

Nurse:  It’s gotten into her bones now.  We had to increase the dosage.

Daniel:  You were supposed to tell me.  You said there’d be time!

Nurse:  I’m sorry. You were sleeping.  It’s her time now.

Daniel:  I’m not ready.  I didn’t say goodbye!

Leia:     Into the firmament… the radiance!  

                                Daniel presses his cheek to Leia’s face. Her eyes look past him.

Daniel:  (softly) I’m sorry I couldn’t find a way….

Leia:     – the magnificence!  

Daniel:   (softer still) You deserved more… so much more.

Leia:     – a whirlwind…

Daniel:  (whispering) I’ll find you.  I’ll never let go.

Leia:     – letting go…   

Daniel:  (a breath)  I’ll find you.

Leia:       Until that day.


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Note:  Of course I didn't notice the part about "in seven bits of dialogue" until now. 
- Jim C.


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Newbie here. Gave myself 15 mins to write and post this, so pls forgive any blatant errors. Cheated a little with a stage direction to close.

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Leia: It's like it feels like this... Oh! I am love! I am light! I feel everything!
I'm going out like a shooting star!

Astra: (laughing) No it doesn't.  That sounds silly...

(Leia sits down)

Leia: It is silly, that's the whole point, stupid (a nudge)!  Feeling silly, stupid, wonderful: it's all part of it.

Astra: (a nudge back) Well it soouunds silly.  I'm not gonna do it.  I would never do it.

Leia: (singsong) Until that day...

Astra: That day what?  No, never!  You can be a fool (laughing and mimicking), love and light and shooting myself in the foot!  You don't know how silly you sound.

Leia: (laughing)  THAT day.  Then you'll be just the same.  (Poking) He will wink out of the window of his big rocket ship and you will jump onboard!  Take me to the moon, I'm going out like  shooting star!

Astra: ...

Astra: (looking away) Not. Going. To. Happen.

Leia: Until. That. Day.

Astra: (flustered) I'm going to meet someone who's not crazy, doesn't drive a rocket ship and who thinks love is the same I do - two people who go well together and aren't INSANE.  AND... we will have the same idea of crazy people like you, who act like idiots as soon as you meet someone.

Leia: (mock cowering) Oooh! Looking down on all of us mere mortals!

Astra: (laughing) YES!  That's love!

Leia: You know what, no, I think you're right.  You will meet someone you go well with, who is or isn't insane.  And I wish you all the best.

Astra: That's right.  And we will be happy.

Leia: (stands) Until that day.

(Astra chases her offstage)

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Mana: 
This is really good. There's the ambiguity I love, and the stage direction is excellent.

"Daniel presses his cheek to Leia’s face. Her eyes look past him."

Have you taken this any further?

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