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 Posted: Thu May 2nd, 2013 01:32 pm
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"A careful reader can see many things in words." Wise words from an old friend of mine ;)

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AT first I read the top line as "Run falls"

And when I get to the bottom I'm thinking, "if it's one line shorter near the bottom it would actually be shaped like a cumulo-nimbus cloud," but I like all the words.

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Rain falls
on the world
into cracks,
into a coffee cup
you once left
outside on the deck
post; each drop comes
tapping into the garden,
trying to be distinguished,
trying to be recognized,
next to a single lane road
where all the vehicles
slow, and everyone
passes with hesitation

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