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 Posted: Thu Oct 26th, 2006 09:48 pm
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BillySundae
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I've never written a one page play before, so be gentle. If you like it I'll try doing one for Edds October Contest.

Barn Yard Conversation: A One Page Play


 

FRED


I love you.

 

MARY


 

You don’t.

FRED


 

I do. (pause)

 

Why don’t I?

 


MARY


You can’t

 


FRED


Why not?

 


MARY


You’re a cow!

 


FRED


 


No, I’m not over weight.

 


MARY


 


True. But, look at yourself: Black and brown spots on white, tail, four legs and hooves. You’re a cow!

 

FRED


                                   

                                    So I am. (pause) You can’t love me for who I am?

 

MARY


 

No.

 


I’m a pig.

 


FRED


 


Love is blind; I hadn’t noticed.

 

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 Posted: Thu Oct 26th, 2006 10:08 pm
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Edd
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I think it's wonderful.  I giggled and squealed!

Do the contest.  It's great exercise and, most of all, you'll have fun!

What did you write today?

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 Posted: Thu Oct 26th, 2006 11:50 pm
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good.  it works.

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 Posted: Sat Oct 28th, 2006 05:38 am
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Made me smile... but if I may, surely Fred can't be a cow and Mary can't be a pig; they would have to be a bull and a sow? I know I'm being picky, but it's little things like that which always distract me in any piece of creative work - and in a shortie in any genre, there maybe isn't time to be distracted. If you flip the dialogue, it still works... in fact, may I venture to suggest that Fred calling Mary a cow and Mary saying she's not overweight is better anyway than the reverse?

And then... some more please!

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 Posted: Sun Oct 29th, 2006 01:12 am
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Very clever!

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Poet is right about the pig and cow issue, but I Loved it.

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 Posted: Sun Oct 29th, 2006 05:07 am
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I was brought up on a dairy farm in upstate NY where we had about 300 cows, 1 bull, 2 work horses, 50 chickens, 1 rooster and 2 pigs (except when one was with pig children and then she was a sow) at any given time but in the fall when we started eating lots of bacon and ham and yet the he-cow flew right over my head while reading this piece--however, this farm boy was brought up to believe that a pig is a pig is a pig regardless of sex or preference.

 

What did you write today?

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 Posted: Tue Oct 31st, 2006 04:12 am
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Love it.  Didn't notice the gender thing, but I'm an urban girl.

The end didn't work.  The last line...I don't know...maybe this...

FRED
Love is blind.


 


MARY


I noticed.


 

Shrug...not sure.

Still....great one minute play, regardless if or not it's your first.

Paddy



 

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