Like the vulture flies
High in thin, wispy near cloudless skies.
In our youth,
Merely a speck in our eyes
There was time.
OK, I have thought on your comments, and with most I agree. The superfluous comma, and the stanza breaks, are notions that I wholeheartedly concur with. Thank you. As far a the capitalization? That was just how I was taught, I am old, and I wonder if it is truly such a big deal? I guess, I just adore the traditional aspects of it. Foolish of me as it maybe. I will think more on it. Thank you, for your time, and thoughtful consideration.