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 Posted: Thu Oct 31st, 2019 11:31 am
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 Losing count
in my old days

The house of the dead
turned into a hostel

Dancing on their graves
why don't they

My toes are cold
a glass of the hard stuff
awaits

The grass is wet
easy to shovel
the friends around
digging
digging
digging

Another glass of the
hard stuff
passing around

My toes are cold

Down to the local
hot toddy awaits

The poor auld soul
at his own wake

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 Posted: Fri Nov 1st, 2019 03:00 pm
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 I am probably not the best person to ask, but I actually loved this poem. The imagery, is excellent. I can not think of a single thing I would alter. Thank you for posting this, I'll be reading it many times over.
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 Posted: Sat Nov 9th, 2019 02:15 pm
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 Thank you David.
Another one dead this week
All falling down around me
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 Posted: Sat Nov 9th, 2019 02:16 pm
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 Thank you David.
Another one dead this week
All falling down around me
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 Posted: Sat Nov 9th, 2019 02:45 pm
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 Potabasil,

Good to see you around.

The Hard Stuff can soften a lot of things.

Beautiful poem.


Best,

IMR
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 Posted: Fri Nov 15th, 2019 11:45 pm
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 Potabasil,

S2 and S4 and the last stanza are to die for. And I mean no disrespect by saying so. They are Bravo.

Peace to you, girl.

timmy

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 Posted: Thu Nov 21st, 2019 08:21 pm
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 Wow
Thank you, Timmy
November always see me around here
All Saints Day and All Souls Day

Must pop in soon when I get a min.

How are you, Timmy?
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 Posted: Fri Nov 22nd, 2019 09:07 am
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