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 Posted: Tue Nov 5th, 2019 03:33 pm
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Greetings, everyone. Recently completed my first play and wanted to join the forum to gain insight from experienced playwrights and get some guidance. Not sure of the forum's etiquette, but willing to observe and learn.

I'm posting Act I, Scene 1 of my play, Swept Away By Murder. It is an homage to the Golden Age of mysteries and staged in a country house setting. There's a play on words for three character names. For instance, the rookie Inspector Honor Broom can be interpreted as "on her broom." As the old adage goes, a new broom sweeps clean, which is her approach to policing.

If you have a moment and can offer any constructive feedback on the first scene, I'd be most appreciative of your help. While looking forward to your comments, I remain

Cordially yours,

Killian_Writes

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 Posted: Thu Nov 7th, 2019 06:03 pm
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Killian,

Welcome to the Forum.

Too difficult to read in the format/layout you have it in. (At least how it appears on my computer.) Margins are erratic and skewed. And misspellings.

This may not be your fault - except the misspellings! As I say it is skewed on my computer. Maybe appears ok on others.

Why don't you just copy and paste 10 pages? That is the usual

You need to make it very easy on the eye for the reader.

Remember...YOU have to "Catch the Eye" and brain of your reader in a standard format.
People who read plays/screenplays for a living are used to accepted formatting. Remember they read so many. If it is not in an accepted formatting, a lot of people in the biz will not even read it.

Best,

IMR

I like the idea you have, but I can not continue. It is a bumpy rural road to my eyes.
It should read like a drive on the Autobahn.

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 Posted: Sat Nov 9th, 2019 08:13 pm
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P.S. I LOVE YOUR TITLE!

Sometimes that is the hardest thing to come up with!

And please ...let me reiterate...do not confuse my comments about your play.

I am not criticizing your PLAY. I CAN'T critique your play because of your formatting.

I am suggesting you find the proper format for your play to make it easy for someone to READ your play so someone can CAN actually critique it.

Best,

IMR

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