|Lose the last verse and be confident in what you have already written expressing so much about the feelings of the artist (as seen in the second verse). I also think that the reference to The Scream is giving too much away to the reader - let them do some work!
A whole series of poems about Munch that interlink would be a marvelous project - I have visions of a beautiful little book illustrated with woodcuts for some reason....
I think I know the painting you are writing about and you quite inspired me to get out an old book I have of his pictures to look at it again. - how much more can one hope for from a poem?!
Great stuff! TKL
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