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 Posted: Tue Feb 10th, 2015 10:20 pm
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Mana: 
I am hoping to get some feedback on my show. The first scene is attached. I'll break it up by scenes so it's not too much all at once. If you're willing/would like to critique the whole piece all at once feel free to PM me and I'll send you the whole script.

Please be very nit-picky. If anything doesn't make sense, you don't think a joke is funny, you question a characters motivation for a certain decision or action, please let me know. If you have any ideas on how to improve lyrics, I would greatly appreciate those as well. Also, if you like something or find a part funny, that would be very useful as well.

If you are a composer, I am still looking for someone to collaborate with on the music. Feel free to PM me.

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