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 Posted: Mon Aug 10th, 2015 02:19 am
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Mr Dee O

 

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INTRODUCTORY TEXT:

Hi, I know you guys are fussy regarding the concept of giving critique when a user has not contributed, 'give for give' and all that - but I'm not really sure how to jump at your community, and I feel like throwing something new out there to read for you is the best contribution I can offer at the moment.

LINK - https://docs.google.com/document/d/1PhQVbZOb_4JZoQVF8cMvx2EagW-FcSaU___dGJDJuEk/edit?pli=1 (alternatively, see attached for same file)

BLABBER:

The play I want to show you covers very mature themes, there are only 9 pages included and the finished (yes it is as finished as I believe I can make it) total of 36 pages.

I honestly have no idea how you or anyone else is going to receive it, and this is the 'tamest' and most gentle part of the whole play.

QUICK YES OR NO STATEMENT QUESTIONNAIRE:
[copy and paste preferred, or 1) yes, 2) no answers..]

1) It bored me so I closed it. -
2) I'm not sure what's going on. -
3) The dialogue was awful. -
4) Too many stage directions. -
5) The characters are dull and not interesting. -
6) The dialogue jumps. -
7) None of the above, and I still don't like it. -

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A big thank-you for getting this far!

- David

Attachment: 10 page sample.zip (Downloaded 0 times)

Last edited on Mon Aug 10th, 2015 02:23 am by Mr Dee O