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 Posted: Sun Nov 12th, 2006 07:05 pm
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Paddy



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Nice rewrite.

I liked the over-topic'd, over-used slogans.  They made the characters flail, which I expect them to.  This is such a nice piece.

One thing...I would like to see this build to a crecendo at the end, so the ripping of the sign is more justified.

Paddy